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Well that was pretty damn insane! Really though it was good. I like the imagery of all the illusions and then at the end how you say how this person ...

My favorite book is either Hocus Pocus by Vonnegut or for the more serious side probably As I lay dying by Faulkner. I write all sorts of stuff, but I ...

"This was a truth I had somehow never had the ability to tell him" -- This sentence was awkward to me. "If I had ever gotten the courage to say ...

"The Doctors and Gawkers use your bloody, choking face for a target and claim death, though you haven’t even died." I thought this stanza kind of tapered off and was ...

Thanks that agent query site is very informative.

Pretty good piece. Worthlessness is a feeling unbeknownst to happy, genuine, perfect people. This part really bothered me, it just did not fit in with the whole poem at all ...

"Wiggling Toes" for a title suggestion. Well this is a very good start. It was sweet, uplifting, simple, rhymed ok, and really a very good start to an already pretty ...

"the seem to have gone." -- just a typo, need to add a y I liked that I couldn't tell if the poet was there watching someone experience this in ...

I felt there were some parts where I could easily imagine the lyrics as song lyrics and someone resonating them, and then there were other parts were I felt like ...

I liked this. I especially liked her eyes, I stared at them for quite some time!

A mermaid war -- that sounds pretty fu%$ing cool -- and I'm being serious.

ha-ha that was funny!^ I was also gonna say, before my internet pooped out, that to get that offended, especially after the first line is to fall into The Bukowski ...

Just talking, I didn't mean anything by it. I've read your stuff and you've seen one of my comments, and I obviously like your writing, because I've read more than ...

Well I know exactly what you mean, but that was Bukowski's style.

Well I mean all great writers burst with it, they only sit by the screen, or typewriter when their editing their work and making it readable. Some of my writer ...